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The world thrusts itself inside
The world thrusts itself inside I felt pain like an assault, The old pain again When the world thrusts itself inside, when we have take in the outside —May Sarton, "Night Watch," Collected Poems The world thrusts itself inside written June 26th, 2021 The world rages through me I wrap my arms around cradling this body amongst the flowers torn, leaves shredded, plants uprooted until the fury passes peace descends on the broken some breath and start to mend others their decay feeds the new. The world thrusts itself inside each of us tearing and stretching throw your head back and rage with the pain and agony of growth made possible by the world tearing open body, heart, and mind. I never grow used to this brutal process, I dip my fingers into the holes made in our heart. The world has its way with us this relentless thrusting climax until we spill out over everything this our mark on the world. |
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I often have an image of a poem in my head, or a feeling of it. The end result is often more analytical than what I had imagined. This one, maybe, is closer to what was in my mind.
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I do think this write has a great deal of the primal aspect of the channelled energy in the initial inspiration, the triggering mechanism. For this reason I think that your selection of punctuation fits really well, here. The opening stanza is just sublime, and carries the activity of a bee hive, into Stanza II, which is equally sublime, contrasting the opening stanza like breath held & breath released. A very cool feeling, as a reader. I very much like the way Stanza III seems to initiate a feeling of movement, from the flash & pause of the first two stanzas. Love the transition from Stanza III to Stanza IV. The continuity has a cool rhythm. And then how you introduce yourself into the poem, in Stanza V. Providing meaning & context in Stanza VI, which feels perfectly placed. I can certainly see why you were pleased with this write. Very cool & awesome. *. *. *
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such strong images. thank you sen
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You are a tornado You start off small As you travel around You gain strength You now are strong Racing along Nothing can stand in you way You leave a path Shows where you been You tire out From with in And gone with the wind
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